The baby
When he arrived home he walked through the door with the baby in his arms .His mum was shocked with what he brought home . she asked him where are the rabbits . He said, “I left them but l will go back if you look after him and keep him warm . His mum nodded and said, “Be fast cause its getting dark “On his way back he saw another rabbit in the distances crept up on it and grabbed his gun and missed . when he got home it was dark and the baby was sleeping .
Kia Ora Montana,
ReplyDeleteI like how you set the scene. It helped me to know what time it was.
This made me wonder how many rabbits they owned.
Maybe next time you could be more descriptive and work on your capital letters.
Other than that you did great. Keep up the great work
Maia from Belfast School.